Graphics are okay, the jokes are really bad
Well, I guess my summary really sums it all up. It was clear to me that you put quite some effort in drawing this movie. The length is fine. The jokes were never really funny though. Also, it not "lonley" it's "lonely".
I mean, the animation was pretty fluid and looked good... but... wth was that? Are you encouraging fat women to go belly dancing? I've got no problems with women with a bit of flesh on their bones but I don't think they should be doing that :-/
Although it's a very short and simple animation, the message is really clear and usefull! Before I saw this flash I didn't know much about the Swine (Mexican) flu, and now I do.
Good to see I've helped someone. :)
Very nice smooth animation you got there. Everything felt very professional even with the fade ins and outs. Really nice work! Could need a bit more content though, like e.g. the end character wrestling with an alligator?
All in all, really impressive!
Thanks for the review. As I said in the comments, this wasn't meant to have a story. It was simply an intro scene as part of an animation class. The story is intentionally absent... more of a teaser. I appreciate the comment. It seems Newgrounds places high importance on story content so I'll have to keep that in mind if and when I submit future content. I have another ready for submission however, like this one, it is animation/actionscript driven and not story driven.
Purr, even a motto!
To be honest, I didn't expect there to be anything after the first screen with "Meow, Kitty is high" which is just... well... random? I don't see any link between that message and your motto... The robot voice is really overused and very annoying - don't, just don't.
The movie itself was really unclear without the motto at the end, although you did at least try to animate it a bit.
It wasn't funny in any way. But with the motto "Don't try to be a hero, kids" I wouldn't expect it to be.
Your reason for posting this movie is really really bad. The fact that you even post it in the comments section is actually worse...
Hmm I've opened another tab so I could keep listening to the music after the movie ended. It's absolutely beautifull... What song is it?
At the start of the movie I saw some redering errors of the text which didn't make me expect what I saw next.
You animated the first part of life very nicely, I really liked the transitions. The way you animated the text as if you were typing it was very nice for this movie - although you could switch to a nice font and only use 1 font instead of different ones.
The text was very fitting to the movie. I'm really interested in the final version of this movie. I hope you can iron out the minor flaws from this trailer.
thank you for the contsructive critisism!! I started making new scenes but the art tuke soo long to draw it was very hard to animate so i might end up redoing it all pretty much...
Looking at the filesize I didn't expect this to be this long...
First of all - the voice is really really loud. In fact, I think my ears are bleeding now. Turn it down a bit, I know it's supposed to be the base of this movie but the quality doesn't allow it too be this loud.
Graphics - well, stick figures. Probably anyone could have made some stick figures. You did make the mouth of the guy animate fairly well though. The zoom-ins and outs did emphasize certain words like you probably meant to do, although using the same effect over and over did seem to get annoying.
The stick guy clapping at the end was an unexpected end in my opinion - and it was funny (a little).
Due to the quality of the sound and graphics I have to stick to a 5.
Well there is a little knob on your speakers that can turn down the volume down... you know that right?
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